Hey guys,
I recently had a dream a few days ago based on two wanted criminals. My dream was probably inspired by a cartoon series called: "Tom and Jerry." In this dream of mine, I played three characters Tom, Kelly and in the ending Jerry. I wrote this short story based on my character's view and feelings because I couldn't control how the events played out. While I was switching characters in my dream it helped me get a better perspective on why the characters did what they did. They all acted on impulse. A friend encouraged me to write a short story based on one of my dreams. So I hope you all enjoy this one.
(THIS IS NOT A STORY FOR KIDS)
(THIS IS NOT A STORY FOR KIDS)
Jerry’s Last Dream of Tom
Introduction: In this dream of mine Tom is a black and white cat; he appears to be 5’6” height with yellow eyes and a white spot on his left eye. Jerry is Tom’s best friend and they’re both strays. In this story Jerry is portrayed as a shape shifter and he can either be a mouse or cat. Jerry appears to be less than a foot (23 cm) tall brown and white cat with green eyes.
On a windy afternoon Tom sits on a red and white blanket in the middle of the forest; he’s surrounded by trees while waiting patiently for Jerry to bring him food. He notices a small stream behind him, as he watches the reflection in the water from the gray sky slurp up the sun. A loud thunder strikes a nearby tree and Tom starts to shiver. He squints both eyes, while rubbing his body for heat and then he looks anxiously between two rows of trees lines up towards a white wooden house. Tom sees a brown and white little mouse running out of a rusty pipe pulling a string with his mouth. Suddenly the mouse then pauses and transforms into a brown and white cat. Tom watches the cat pull a string from the pipe that was tied to a black bag. Tom shouts “Hey Jerry…Jerry is that you?”
Jerry approaches Tom with a black plastic bag and says, “Shh! keep your voice down, sorry I’m late again...those two twins held me up again” Tom helps Jerry untie the bag and replies: “Twins? You’re making contact now?” Jerry smiles shaking his head replying, “No…not physically, but my eyeballs were doing all the touching. The twins were getting ready for school this morning; I got the front seat of watching them shower. Oh Tom, you don’t know, what you’re missing buddy.” Tom pulls out a red sweater with a Gorillaz logo on the front and a pair of gray socks along with red and white Nikes. Tom takes a stand and looks at Jerry angrily and says “This is it? Why didn't you bring any food?” Jerry throws a black sweat pants at Tom’s feet and tells him, “Food? I brought clothes for you. Yesterday you were whining and complaining about your body being exposed. You’re a black cat. A cat is what you will always be and furthermore, cats don’t wear clothes. I go out every day to steal for you. I think it’s about time, you start stealing for me.” Jerry starts to licks his paws and Tom tries on each clothing while shouting at Jerry “You know I can’t leave this forest, I can’t go anywhere because I am too big. If I leave, people will start talking and rumors will spread. People might try to kill me, maybe worse. They might experiment on me. I am no longer a man I once was Jerry; I can’t find a woman and I’m homeless now. I can’t shape shift like you!” Jerry stops licking and laughs at Tom, “Ha...ha...ha, stupid kitty.” Jerry throws his paws around Tom and says: “I know you can’t go out in public stupid, this is why you have me. I brought you these clothes because I want you to look like a man, a man that will rob the same house; I borrowed these clothes from.” Tom smiles and looks at Jerry while saying “That is a good idea Jerry; this is why we are friends, but why that house?” Jerry points to a white house in-between two sets of trees and a young woman in her mid-twenties is standing near the rusty pipe. Jerry responds, “You see that house right there, I think that girl’s parents is wealthy… she have a twin sister, thank god they are fraternal because this one got all the ugly.” Tom looks at the girl, mesmerized by the freckles on her nose and Jerry smacks Tom behind the head and says, “Ay...stupid listen to me. We will rob that house as soon she leaves.”
Jerry reaches into Toms sweater pockets and pulls out a gun, while pointing the gun to Tom’s head Jerry whispers, “On the first floor of that house, you will find a closet filled with Jewelry with price tags. Once you get your hands on those Jewels, get out fast and make sure you close the window behind you. Don’t be an idiot and leave it open.” Tom looks at Jerry clueless and ask “Why don’t you trust me?” Jerry pokes Tom with the gun in the head whispering, “I don’t trust you because I saw that look in your eyes, when you saw that ugly bitch with the freckles. That look gave you away and I been your best friend far too long to ignore your carelessness.” Tom looks at the house and told Jerry “I will rob that house, just for you Jerry, only because you’re my brother and even though, I have no wife and no family of my own. You’re the closest thing, I have to family. I wouldn't mind dying for you because you’re the only family, I have left Jerry.” Jerry gives Tom the gun to rob the house. Jerry picks up a few twigs around the area, placing them around the four corners of the blanket. He then picks up a plastic bag and spreads it open over the sticks to create a little shelter. Tom finds a baseball hat in his sweater and puts it on. Jerry sits, “It’s time buddy…go get our precious jewels before the girls return home. I’ll be right here waiting until you get back. Jerry licks himself as Tom takes his leave.
Jerry reaches into Toms sweater pockets and pulls out a gun, while pointing the gun to Tom’s head Jerry whispers, “On the first floor of that house, you will find a closet filled with Jewelry with price tags. Once you get your hands on those Jewels, get out fast and make sure you close the window behind you. Don’t be an idiot and leave it open.” Tom looks at Jerry clueless and ask “Why don’t you trust me?” Jerry pokes Tom with the gun in the head whispering, “I don’t trust you because I saw that look in your eyes, when you saw that ugly bitch with the freckles. That look gave you away and I been your best friend far too long to ignore your carelessness.” Tom looks at the house and told Jerry “I will rob that house, just for you Jerry, only because you’re my brother and even though, I have no wife and no family of my own. You’re the closest thing, I have to family. I wouldn't mind dying for you because you’re the only family, I have left Jerry.” Jerry gives Tom the gun to rob the house. Jerry picks up a few twigs around the area, placing them around the four corners of the blanket. He then picks up a plastic bag and spreads it open over the sticks to create a little shelter. Tom finds a baseball hat in his sweater and puts it on. Jerry sits, “It’s time buddy…go get our precious jewels before the girls return home. I’ll be right here waiting until you get back. Jerry licks himself as Tom takes his leave.
Tom enters the backyard of the house and he slowly walks up the stairs. The wind blows heavily almost blowing his hat off. He uses his right hand to push his hat down. Then he approaches the window and lean forward. He scans the inside of the house and notices Jerry left the window’s lock open. Tom can see the kitchen from looking through the window. There was a table near the window filled with school books and above on the wall yellow sticky notes pasted all over. Tom glances at a few sticky notes; while he opens the window. He jumps over the window-sill mumbling to himself, “Homework, pages 1-15 and math book pages 9-15. Uh huh these chicks is probably sexy and smart…Jerry, Jerry, Jerry you lucky rascal you.” Tom walks towards a black closet and open the door. He picks up a Jewel box and his eyes grow dark; as if he had sniffed some catnip. Tom’s tail begin to wag in his pants each time the diamond ring shines; his eyes grew darker. Tom mumbles to himself: “$2000…Holy Shit we hit the jackpot Jerry.” Tom hears a voice and turns towards the stairs; he places the box down on the wooden floor and walks towards the stairs behind him. He hears a giggle coming from downstairs. He lean over the balcony and notices a girl in the house.
One of the twin sisters came home early from gym practice; she leans over the kitchen counter shaking her booty to the music on her iPod and while she's text on the phone. Her short black hair is in a pony-tail. Her pink tank top is so thin Tom can see her bra color printing right through. Tom stares at the outline of her bra and his eyes begin to shake from side to side; after a glimpse of her booty. The front door slams and Tom’s claws points out sharply. He notices the other twin sister just enter the kitchen and couldn't stop staring at her freckles. Tom’s eyes grew darker and his tail curls out of his pants. He stares intently at the girl with the freckles and he then grabs his tail stroking it. She puts her purse down shout at him, “Hey…Who you are? What are you doing here?” She grabs a knife from the kitchen and approaches Tom. He makes a run to the backdoor and couldn't open the door knob with his paws. While he struggles to open the door knob; the girl approaches him with a knife behind her back. She notice the closet door was open with some Jewels on the floor. She shuts the closet door shouting and Tom pushes the door knob with his mouth; left the house running on four paws. The girl runs out the door shouting: “Hey…you thief, you came here to steal from my mother again? You better not come back here, I will kill you the first chance I get." She notice a wagging tail dangling behind him. She turns around; watching her sister texting and dancing to her music.
One of the twin sisters came home early from gym practice; she leans over the kitchen counter shaking her booty to the music on her iPod and while she's text on the phone. Her short black hair is in a pony-tail. Her pink tank top is so thin Tom can see her bra color printing right through. Tom stares at the outline of her bra and his eyes begin to shake from side to side; after a glimpse of her booty. The front door slams and Tom’s claws points out sharply. He notices the other twin sister just enter the kitchen and couldn't stop staring at her freckles. Tom’s eyes grew darker and his tail curls out of his pants. He stares intently at the girl with the freckles and he then grabs his tail stroking it. She puts her purse down shout at him, “Hey…Who you are? What are you doing here?” She grabs a knife from the kitchen and approaches Tom. He makes a run to the backdoor and couldn't open the door knob with his paws. While he struggles to open the door knob; the girl approaches him with a knife behind her back. She notice the closet door was open with some Jewels on the floor. She shuts the closet door shouting and Tom pushes the door knob with his mouth; left the house running on four paws. The girl runs out the door shouting: “Hey…you thief, you came here to steal from my mother again? You better not come back here, I will kill you the first chance I get." She notice a wagging tail dangling behind him. She turns around; watching her sister texting and dancing to her music.
The front door opens and Kelly puts down the knife. Her dad George enters the kitchen. Kelly shouts at her dad, “Dad there was a thief in the house again. They try to steal mom’s wedding ring. I tried to scare him away with this knife.” George looks at his daughter and says: "Forget about him sweetie;go take your pills." He tries to convince Kelly this is just another hallucination. Kelly disagrees and leaves the house in search of the thief.
Tom came running to Jerry’s little shelter. Jerry stops licking his butt and looks up at Tom asking: “What the hell did you do now?” Tom grabs his tail and says: “What make you think I did anything wrong?” Jerry searches Tom while asking, “Where is the jewels… you fucking idiot? Uh?” Tom frowns at Jerry and said: “I never made it into the house; I got hungry. So I decided to find myself some food and then I came back here.”
As the wind blows colder; the sky turns grayer. Jerry hears foot-steps nearby and Tom sees a girl walking their way. Tom takes off his clothes and hides it under the blanket while hiding the gun near his side. Jerry tells Tom to lay down like a cat so he can hide under him. Kelly approaches Tom and starts petting him: “Hey kitty…aw w your so cute. Have you seen a guy with a red sweater around this forest?” Tom replies: “Nope not around here” Kelly stops petting Tom in shock while stuttering: “You…you can talk; cats don’t talk. Am I hallucinating? My dad is probably right…I’m finally losing it” Tom puts his paw on Kelly’s mouth telling her: “You’re not hallucinating. My name is Tom.” Kelly mumbles: “I’m having a conversation with a cat. Yup! I finally have lost my mind completely. I officially belong in the loony bin…forever and alone.” Kelly notice a baseball hat sticking out of the blanket. She pulls it out from under the blanket waving it in the air shouting, “Uh huh… You were the one who was trying to steal my mother’s wedding ring. I should kill you.” Tom stares while whispering so Jerry won’t hear: “You were that girl? I've been waiting here for a long time. Just hoping one day; you’ll notice a stray cat and come over. I have watched you every day enter and leave from that house. Your cute freckles on your forehead. I would give anything to be human again. Just to place a thousand kisses upon your freckled nose. Every time you laugh;I can’t help falling in love with those dimpled cheeks. I would give anything to place a kiss upon them and wait a lifetime for my kisses to sink into your heart.” Kelly blushes and asks Tom: “Why did you break into my house? That closet you opened; it was filled with all my mother’s jewelry. She was a famous actress and a gang of men broke into our house and killed her two months ago. I came home late one night and saw her naked laying on her bed. She was raped repeatedly my dad said. Ever since last month, my hallucinations never stopped and my boyfriend broke up with me because of it.” Tom looks at Kelly in remorse and reply: “I am sorry for all that have happened; I apologize for breaking into your house. I am a wanted criminal.
My real name is Tommy. A year ago, my best friend and I robbed a bank and got away clean. Then five months later, the police came knocking at our door looking for us and they chased both of us towards this forest. In this forest we found a small cabin that an old lady once lived in; she said we will pay for our wrong doings. That day my best friend and I was both hexed by a witch. I became a cat and the old lady gave me a new name Tom. She turned my best friend in his sleep. He woke up a shape shifter. His transformation as a shape-sifter is temporary; but the witch originally turned him into a mouse. He can’t shape-shift into a human; he tried many times. We begged the old lady to turn us back but she kept shouting, when the white moon fills the red vile all hell breaks..... After those words she vanished.” Kelly stares at Tom with sorrow, “I’m sorry for everything that happened to you. Where is your best friend now?” Thunder roars and the clouds begin to move swiftly causing a light drizzle. George runs out the house shouting, “KELLY, WHERE ARE YOU?”
Kelly puts on Tom’s baseball cap saying: “Hey it’s getting late. I will come back tomorrow and will you be here? I promise, I will come back. I have to make sure your real and this isn't another one of my hallucinations?” Tom shakes his head “Yes, of course I will be here.” Jerry struggles to get out from under Tom as he watches her leave.
Jerry rises from under Tom in rage, he shouts at Tom:“You fucking idiot; you think I didn't hear you? I knew you fucked up again. You’re always fucking up? I shouldn't have trusted you…What took you so long to kill that bitch? Uh uh… I knew every shit that comes out of your mouth is a fucking lie. Lies on top of lies.” Jerry takes a stand on all four legs and jumps on Tom’s chest; scratching Tom’s face. Jerry pauses and search for the gun. Suddenly, Tom takes off running in one direction on two legs. Kelly then approaches her front door and look around before putting the keys in. She saw Tom running pass her house on two paws. She opens her door and grab her father’s pistol from the kitchen cabinet. Kelly rush outside chasing after Tom shouting: “Hey, where the fuck are you going? I will kill you- don’t run away. I knew what you were saying were all lies; why else would you be running. I’m catching up with you.” Behind Kelly Jerry also is chasing after Tom with a pistol shouting: “Best friends huh…here pussy, pussy, pussy…I will fucking kill you Tom. We got hexed because of your idea to get rich and I was foolish to go along with your idea. I will hate you Tom.”
The rain starts to pour heavy and the wind blows heavier carrying a roar from the thunder. Trees begins to fall in the forest. While Tom runs around the forest; he catches a glimpse of a tree crushing falling down on their shelter. Kelly stops running to catch her breath. She hears a loud roar coming from the sky and watches a lightning bolt struck a tree in font of Jerry chasing Tom. Jerry runs pass her shouting “You fucking pussy, why you running like a little bitch for…I thought we’re best friends” The tree falls and a bullet flew pass Kelly striking Jerry in the back. Jerry got up off the floor and starts running towards Tom. Kelly watches Tom falls to the floor. She runs towards him and takes a knee turning him over on his back. Kelly starts to cry shouting, “Tom... I’m sorry, I’m sorry Tom…Jerry shot you; he tripped on a tree and the trigger went off in his hands.” Jerry approaches Tom saying, “Oh shit. Shit, Shit, Shit Tom it was an accident. I love you buddy. I was just trying to scare you. I might have shot you but not in your chest; not in this way. Please don’t die on me man. We’re brothers, we’re best friends, we’re family and you’re the only family I have left. You were right about that.” Tom looks at Kelly and ask “Why were you chasing me with a gun?” Kelly tries to stop the blood with her hands while replying" “I never used a gun before Tom. My pistol had no bullets in it.” Tom smiles and says: “So you were chasing me with an empty gun... you love me don’t you? Wait don’t answer that. I loved you. Way before, I got to meet you in person Kelly.”
Jerry holds in a tear and notice the sky is clearing and the moon is setting.
Jerry watches the blood drain endlessly from his best friend’s chest. The rain water around him was fully colored in Tom’s blood. Jerry and Kelly both watches the moon’s reflection in the water beside Tom. The moons white reflection slowly fades to red. Tom’s hairs slowly sheds and his white skin turns pale. Kelly see’s Tom’s mustache and pink lips. His yellow eyes fades to blue. Tom moves his hand to hold Kelly’s hand’s tightly, filling the gaps in-between their fingers. Tom looks at Jerry forcing both his eyes open and says: “I’m happy Jerry, I’m happy my blood was spilled in your hands. I love you too buddy.” Jerry watches Tom’s spirit leaves the living body and then runs into the forest as a mouse with no shape-shifting ability.
I wanted to like this more than I did. I think there's so much potential in it. I know you made the disclaimer that this was based on a dream in the beginning but I think you could have structured it a little more. It got hard to keep up at times and for ME as a reader, that was due in part to such long paragraphs and sometimes a lack of distinction in who was speaking. Other than that, like I said, so much potential. This makes for a good story, it just needs to be restructured and neatened a little. (E.H)
ReplyDeleteIt is difficult to keep up with the story when the dialogue is not always clear. Restructuring will help. There is a lot going on in this story that can be used effectively.
ReplyDeleteit was not easy to transfer a dream to a reality but you did. it was a good story I enjoyed reading it, also your story was inventive and amazing. good luck for your second draft.
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